Mind Reading for Authors and an Excerpt, by Jann Rowland

Mind Reading for Authors and an Excerpt, by Jann Rowland

The new year has arrived, and with it the time-honored tradition of setting resolutions for the coming year. Personally, I’ve never been one for setting resolutions. I’ve always been of the opinion that we should constantly be looking at our lives, our behavior, and trying to correct the things we see in ourselves which are not as we wish them to be. This is true not only in our personal lives and our relationships with others, but in our professional lives also.

Recently, I’ve been reminded that not everything goes to plan, not all our expectations are realized, and, though I sometimes fool myself into believing the old Field of Dreams axiom (If you [write] it, they will come), that is not always the case. This has spawned an excess of reflection, and as it’s the beginning of the year, I thought I would discuss my thoughts.

Being an author is often like trying to read minds. What do readers like? What do they want to read? What kind of stories would they like to read? What will they shun? If I had a window into the collective minds of those who read what I write, all my novels would be stunning successes, and I’d never have a disappointment again. Alas, until someone invents that machine or teaches me that talent, I, and other authors like me are stuck with guessing. Of course, that doesn’t take into account different tastes, but you know what I mean.

In the time since I started writing Pride and Prejudice adaptations, I’ve learned a few things, rules for writing a successful variation, if you will. The first, and only rule which cannot be broken, I believe, is you cannot, under any circumstances, split up ODC. Those among you who have been reading in the genre long enough will probably greet that statement with a heartfelt “Duh!” and a roll of your eyes, but I have seen a few attempts to do this. Other than that, pretty much anything goes. I’ve had Jane end up with Colonel Fitzwilliam, I’ve killed her off, I’ve killed off just about every other Bennet (the only exception being Kitty, which is odd), I’ve had Georgiana end up with Bingley, and I’ve had many other pairings. I’ve also taken the three main villains (Lady Catherine, Caroline Bingley, and George Wickham) along with the main comic relief (William Collins) and made them all good, rational, even likable characters at times. I’ve even cast Jane as a quasi-villain, made Mr. Bennet into a vengeful creep, and even into a baron!

But I wonder, is it possible to take things too far, to change to much? If I take the characters in directions that change too many of them at once, have I lost the true feeling of Pride and Prejudice? As importantly to my professional life, will I lose my audience because of it? I am not certain I can answer that. I suppose that’s something I’ll have to let the reader decide.

Of course, writing isn’t only about what other people want to read, though if you want to have any success at all that has to be a big part of your thinking. I also write what I enjoy writing. In the P&P genre, it helps that what I like to write is quite often what others like to read, but that is not always the case. Though I’ve come to know what most P&P readers like, there will always be missteps and miscalculations. When that happens, I try to respond with philosophy and gratitude that though things don’t always go my way, I’m still blessed enough to be doing something I love. Not everyone can say that!

As time goes on and my priorities change, it is quite possible my endeavors will change also. As you may have read in my bio, fantasy fiction has always been my first love, and my ultimate goal is to move deeper into that genre. I would also like to write more mainstream historical fiction, and perhaps mix the two. For those of my fans who want me to keep writing about Darcy and Elizabeth, I will note that I will probably not stop writing adaptations. For one, they are a lot of fun, and for another, I don’t want to disappoint my fans!

The astute reader will note that I’ve sprinkled the covers of several of my previous adaptations throughout this article, and the even more astute will likely guess, given the topic of this post, that they are those which did not quite do as well as expected. I’ve had my share of successes, but I’ve also had a few of the other variety, and these are they. Ironically, I believe that some of my best work have been those which have not done so well. Coming on the heels of The Mistress of Longbourn, which did very well, I thought My Brother’s Keeper was a surefire hit. But for some reason, readers didn’t seem to agree that George Wickham reined in and helping Darcy find his way to Elizabeth was believable or interesting. But it remains one of my personal favorites of my own work. Similarly, I feel I did quite well in relating Lydia’s tale with a truly awful Mr. Wickham in A Life from the Ashes, but whether it is because Lydia was the main character or for some other reason, readers did not agree. The rest were also varying degrees of disappointments

On the other side of the ledger, In the Wilds of DerbyshireOut of Obscurity, and The Mistress of Longbourn were all very successful, and while I had a notion Out of Obscurity would be a success, I had little idea either of the others would do as well as they did. And perhaps the greatest surprise, when you adjust for length of story, Mr. Bennet Takes Charge, a novella I started at the urging of a friend who suggested I write a novella, was my most successful to date. Like I said, you just can’t tell sometimes.

So, speak Austen Authors fans! What do you like to see in a variation?

For the second part of this post, I thought I’d give you an excerpt. I apologize in advance, for this little nugget is hot off the presses, and has not been edited, so there may be a few mistakes in it. To set the stage, Darcy goes to Lambton to see, and perhaps propose, to Elizabeth after her visit the previous day. He is stopped on the way with a momentous piece of news which becomes even more important when he meets Elizabeth at the inn.

“Please be quick, Snell, for I have important business to attend to today.”

While the valet made no immediate reply, Darcy could see his looks of speculation. For the moment, the man continued in his task, shaving the previous day’s stubble from Darcy’s chin and cheeks. When he was finished, he wiped the remaining soap from Darcy’s face and pulled away the towel, allowing Darcy to stand. When given the choice of jackets, Darcy was so impatient to be away, he did not care for so minor a matter as the color of his garment. Snell took the simple expedient of choosing the forest green jacket and helping his master into the sleeves.

“It seems matters of great import are afoot, Mr. Darcy,” observed the valet.

“Perhaps,” replied Darcy, knowing it was useless to protest at this juncture.

Snell gave him a long look. “Might I be correct in assuming this change has come about due to the unexpected appearance of the young lady from Hertfordshire? I hope it is not because of the young . . . woman staying with her brother.”

To this question Darcy was forced to grin. By the simple definition of proper deference for a master, the question was an impertinence, for the master’s business was not the servant’s. In this instance, however, Darcy could not be angry. The matter of his future bride was one that would have a profound influence on all his staff; Darcy was aware his servants had long worried he would make Miss Caroline Bingley, a woman who would make their lives miserable and their tasks more difficult, an offer of marriage. It was only natural Snell, the servant in the best position to question him, acted as the spokesman and attempt to discover if calamity was about to befall them.

“If you truly thought it was the woman in residence, I should be concerned for your powers of perception,” said Darcy.

A hint of a smile—the most Darcy had ever seen from the man—appeared at the corners of his lips. “That is good news, sir. Then I wish you luck.”

“Which you would not have offered had I been considering Miss Bingley,” replied Darcy with a laugh. “At present I do not know what will happen, Snell, but I am hopeful. Miss Bingley was never a possibility—you may share that with the rest of the staff if you like.”

“Very well, sir,” replied Snell, bowing and stepping away.

After inspecting himself in the mirror for a moment, Darcy excused himself to make his way to the stables. As he walked, he reflected on the changes wrought in an instant, brought on by unexpected events. Whereas he had little hope before coming to Pemberley, meeting Miss Elizabeth Bennet here upon his arrival had filled his mind with thoughts of what could be, with ideas of how he could persuade her. It had been the previous evening, however, when she had dined at Pemberley with her aunt and uncle that had sent his imagination soaring at the possibilities. The kindness she had shown to his sister, her actions in fending off Miss Bingley’s taunts, the way she had looked at him as Georgiana had played the pianoforte. She was not as set against him as she once was—Darcy could feel it! This opportunity could not be allowed to go to waste. Somehow, he must convince her that accepting his solicitations was where her future lay.

Before long, Darcy reached the stables, pleased to find his horse already saddled as per the instructions he had sent down thirty minutes before. With a brief check of the saddle, Darcy swung himself into the saddle and spurred his mount into a canter.

It was a warm summer morning, the likes of which showed his home to its greatest advantage. It was also an especially auspicious day, as it was a day in which he would once more be in Miss Elizabeth’s company, would have another opportunity to show her how important her good opinion was. Surely nothing could happen which would take away from this marvelous day.

But, of course, one could not predict the future, and soon found he was destined to be disappointed. As Lambton wove into view not many minutes later, Darcy found himself riding through the narrow streets of the town toward the inn in which resided his heart. The bustle of the town was a welcome friend, a balm to his frenetic thoughts and excitement. Here the business of life was uppermost in the minds of these people, and Darcy could not help but recall that his life was entwined with theirs intimately by reason of his estate’s proximity. They were his people and he theirs. Darcy firmly hoped Miss Elizabeth would soon belong to them also.

Darcy turned onto the narrow street on which lay the inn that was his destination. Lambton, being built amid a series of low hills, was a maze of narrow, twisting streets which sometimes confounded those entering the town driving carriages of wagons. While Darcy stopped at a corner to allow a wagon heavy laden with good pass him by, a shopkeeper approached and hailed him.

“Mr. Darcy,” said Mr. Draper, the proprietor of the town’s general store. “Might I have a moment of your time?”

Little though he wished to delay, Darcy had always known it was best to foster good relations with the merchants of Lambton. Thus, he returned the man’s greeting and dismounted his horse to better converse with him.

“How might I assist?”

“I have information which you will find of interest, sir,” said Mr. Draper, looking graver than usual. “This morning I heard from Barnwell that Mr. Wickham has been seen in the area.”


There you have it! I hope you are breathless with anticipation, or at least that it has piqued your interest. I won’t tell you what the working title is, because it would give too much away and mislead you at the same time. Suffice to say that it’s a novella of about 40,000 words, but you’ll have to wait until February for its release.

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January 13, 2020 5:47 PM

I like variety so I am pretty open to almost anything with the exception of ODC ending up with someone else or alone and miserable. Even then I will still read but won’t enjoy so much. I am a fan of certain tropes like forced or arranged marriages and I like when fantasy or supernatural elements are added in.

January 13, 2020 5:53 AM

Dear Mr Rowland I have to agree with about ODC. I get an icky feeling reading story lines that seperate them it is just not right IMO.
I like books about them or have them in the story line.
I personally do not enjoy books that concentrate on peripheral characters excusifly .I have read most of your books and have enjoyed them very much. I purchase them rather than borrow because I like to re read books . In saying that I prefer a good long read rather than novellas some are just too short one I saw the other day was 48 pages that pos a chapter not a book.
Any how that’s my opinion for what it is worth I look forward to your next release to add it to my library.

Linny B
Linny B
January 9, 2020 2:02 AM

I enjoy stories with early get together of D and E with angst coming from outside forces and they work together. Jane and the Colonel are favorite variation but probably because I have read several great variations with the two matched up. I really do not care much for Wickham or Lydia. I find them shallow in the original P&P and uninteresting. Admire your writing so interested in your characterizations. Thanks for sharing excerpt.

Gianna Thomas
January 9, 2020 12:58 AM

Enjoyed your excerpt, Jann, and definitely look forward to your new one. Like you, the ones I like the best of mine are not the ones that did the best: EC and DvLC.

I do agree that one should never divide our dear couple and always give them their HEA. However, I have heard several times that variations about secondary characters don’t seem to do as well. And even though I do enjoy them, I don’t love them like I do those about Darcy and Elizabeth. One exception: ‘Love’s Fool: The Taming of Lydia Bennet.’ That was hilarious, and I loved it.

As to your books, I can’t think of one I didn’t enjoy. All have had interesting and unique plots, and they are well written also. Like you, I would love to know exactly what readers want, expect, and are willing to buy and keep. Unfortunately, I think we will still find ourselves in a perpetual guessing game. Sigh!

Gianna Thomas
January 9, 2020 1:47 AM
Reply to  Gianna Thomas

I didn’t realize I missed ‘A Life From the Ashes’ and will remedy that when finished with a certain project. 🙂

cindie snyder
cindie snyder
January 8, 2020 7:16 PM

Sounds like a good one!

January 8, 2020 4:59 PM

I’m ALL astonishment! I’m looking forward to reading this one.

Robin G.
Robin G.
January 8, 2020 1:58 PM

Like Walter, I feel it is easier to describe what I don’t like. Also, I’m answering this as a general question, and not specific to your writing, which I enjoy.

Massive angst fests can be difficult to slog through, so the author needs to make up for it with great “feels” between ODC. Some of these angst fests try to make up for it by making Elizabeth almost super-human whereby everyone, except the bad guys, worship her.

I don’t like physical violence, particularly sexual assault, no matter who is involved.

Some variations end too abruptly. If you have 300-400 pages of angst, the reader wishes to be rewarded with some scenes of love. A decent epilogue could be used to show the couple’s happiness and possibly tie up loose ends with some of the lesser characters.

While I realize that bad guys do not always receive proper punishment in real life, I find it less satisfying when an author makes a character a villain, and then he/she receives little to no punishment.

I need to relate to Elizabeth and fall in love with Darcy. If one or both do not occur, I will not enjoy the book. Some of the modern versions seem to have a hard time here. It’s also appears tough for a lot of authors writing modern versions to stay true to the original story and make Jane and Bingley seem like characters you would want in your life.

Finally, I don’t like it when Darcy is made into a rake with a stream of mistresses prior to meeting Elizabeth, and sometimes, continuing after they meet.

Thanks for asking, Jann!

Walter Krause
Walter Krause
January 8, 2020 11:08 AM

“Murder at Netherfield” in my opinion ranks among your best P&P variations. Maybe, too many readers think “murder” a bit shrill. Well, I’m certainly not among them but I can imagine that people secretly enjoying a certain amount of angst do not enjoy showing such feelings in advance.

“My Brother’s Keeper” and “The Companion” are very good though not among your best P&P books, and Lydia Bennet (“A Life from the Ashes”) is not such an interesting character to attract a majority of P&P fans.

Of course I never can prescribe to a gifted author what he should do. I simply may tell what he or she should NOT do: Never make Lizzy marry first another man and especially not that fool parson, never let Darcy appear too stupid (a considerable amount of denseness is quite in order and even necessary but beware of carrying it too far), never omit the HEA (never mix up Romeo and Juliet with our two lovers). Do not squint too much at possible readers in writing (many gifted P&P variation authors have spoiled or damaged their books in this way), just follow your own intuition!

J. W. Garrett
J. W. Garrett
January 8, 2020 10:11 AM

Unlike many readers, I am not into time-travel or time-slip. I have a few I have read but they are not my favorite tropes. I enjoyed your ‘My Brother’s Keeper.’ It was so different I couldn’t put it down. This was such a new version of Wickham that I couldn’t help but be drawn to this trope and thought you did a great job going against the mainstream bad boy version everyone uses. On the flip side of that coin, I also enjoyed Lydia’s story in ‘A Life from the Ashes.’ Wow! Both, again, are people we don’t normally want to read about. I thought ‘The Companion’ was just delightful. Sorry, haven’t read ‘Murder at Netherfield’ yet. It is on my list though. It sounds a bit scary and nerve wracking and I will need to ‘gird up my loins’ so I can stand it. I have to be in a mentally safe space in order to tolerate mysteries like that.

I enjoyed the excerpt from the yet unnamed novella. Guess I’ll need to wait until Feb to read it. Looking forward to that. I wish you blessings in the new year and much success in all your hard work.

January 8, 2020 7:48 AM

My favourite P&P variations are about Mary Bennet and the Colonel

Danielle C
January 8, 2020 6:18 AM

You know I really enjoy a time swap or time travel variation. I would love to see a Regency Darcy thrown into our times. Am I missing one? Is there one out there that I have overlooked?

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